I was victimized.
You son of a fucking bitch,
do you understand you lost only your love?
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Author notes
A news story that disturbed me a lot
It isn't 5-7-5 kind of write
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this is a wonderfull piece, brief and to the point.you have a sensitive heart and expression.Superb!
language: 4, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 5.
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Short and sweet but it still gets this point across. This is a horrible picture I just hate to see animals fighting each other. excellent write.
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perfect
I just had to comment that this is the most fitting picture I've seen for a poem. The poem itself is visceral and real. Two qualities I very much admire. Good stuff.
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 3, tone: 4, form: 3.
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Hi R...
Glad that you like this little poem.
Thanks for your time, dear friend.
Love
-Kiddy
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You must have felt real anger upon reading the news story? It shows in the poem. I like that the three lines was able to communicate the anger perfectly and that it was speaking on the victims perspective. The last line....that's where all that energy dwindles in the sense that you suddenly felt that the person lost more...so much more. Good short poem.
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Iphios...
Thanks for dropping in by this little poem... Happy this poem communicates my anger... but more than that I was filled with kinda helplessness and inexplicable sadness when I came to know about her future...
Thanks again iphios
Love
-Kiddy
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Wow.
and I am glad you put in author notes, otherwise I might have asked too lol
Such a strong thing in He lost his love, but I lost myself! Pain is mine.
Very good writing here Ms Kiddy
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 3, tone: 3, form: 3.
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Hi Cindy...
Nice to hear from you...Would you believe, I wrote this poem after getting inspired by yours suicidal theme... Kudos to you...
Thanks Cindy
Take cares
luv
-Kiddy
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Damn, Ms. Kiddy
You sound pissed. But I need more. I'd like to know what's going on behind the scenes. Please flesh this out a bit more. I'm intrigued and asking questions, but now I'd like an answer. Clue me in, Kiddy.
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Hi Al,
Hope my 'Notes will help you get what went behind the scenes... I added it lately after your comment..
Thanks for your time
Love
Kiddy
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I'm still lost, Kiddy.
Tell me the story, please. I can be real dense sometimes.
Al
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short but unbelievably powerful. a poem i will remember..
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Hi Annac
Thanks for stopping by this little poem.
Luv
-Kiddy
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