Maybe i need to
lighten it up a bit;
My funnybone been
getting the worst of it.
He done me wrong,
But I couldn't give a $@*%.
I'll write all day
and he'll have to pay for it.
Author notes
I never had it got it or asked for it but this is how I'd use it.
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Fun and clever
This is cool. I like it a lot. The last line is very dynamic for me because when I first read it I did not immediately think of him "paying for it" as his money supporting the writing in a financial way. I thought of it as more of emotional payment, as if his wrongdoings and his character would be revealed in the things you wrote. It was a double meaning and a double whammy for me -- his money paying to expose his wrongs publicly. With "alimony" being the title you'd think I'd automatically tune into the financial aspect but it was that emtional payment that came to me first. Perhaps it is just my backwards mind...
Good poem!
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Musing over the possibility of doing something you never did does have its humor. Yeah, why not just get it for the laugh. Be idle and then get money for doing nothing. The fruits of divorce! But then, waiting for money isn't much, doesn't give a person dignity. I enjoyed reading this, the very first poem i've read about alimony and it made me smile.
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alex, I can hear a beat-up sax in the background for this mightyfine bit of blues, a "he done me wrong" blues, but not one that looks back; this one looks ahead, with a lightened-up funnybone, to getting the writer's arse in a bucket of butter, and she can write "all day" 'til the cows come home.
A spicey dollop of fun. But I'll have to check my dictionary for "$@*%", or maybe it's in the Bible somewhere...
Lad -
hey riveralex
what a grand idea, you need to get married so you can get divorced.
dave -
heh, heh...
I like it. Clever, witty and biting with just the right amount of sarcasm. Good stuff, Alex.
Al
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