Lying on the floor
Cruled up in a ball
Tears falling from face
For no reason why
I lie here and I cry
Not because of you
But other reasons why
Why haven't got a clue
I wish I only knew
Why these tears fall from my eyes
I feel an emptiness
Don't know what from
I wish I only knew
Why I cry the tears I do
For no apparent reason why I just
Wish I knew why
Nothing going on in this head I have
All I know is these tears that fall
Aren't because of you
My heart and soul really loves you
I only wish I knew
I wish I only knew why I cry these tears
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This is nice. I like the flow and meaning. People can relate to something like this. The only thing that sticks out to me, is the last two lines. I don't think they quite fit together well. To me, it seems like the first before last line is incomplete and then you change your mind and write the last line instead. (if that makes any sense at all!) I think you should just keep the last line or drop it and have "I only wish I knew why I cry these tears I do." Or something like that, to keep the flow going.
nicely done,
Ashley
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Thank you for your comment it is highly appreciated. I am glad you caught that I will make sure to fix that thank you very much.
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