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Dawn of the moon



Bring down the Sun as heaven screams
in the dark horizons of broken dreams.
Let sunshine fade into the sea
as shadows conquer all of me.

A storm of stars,a tide of fears
until the face of the Moon appears.
Under the sky a high fire burns
the soft,cold breeze the loss mourns.

Alone i stand clenching my cloak
in the divine waters my eyes soak.
The Moon reaches for the eerie veil
the crystal silence of the night so frail.

The wind echoes whispers of far away
time for the holy damned to pay.
The grass gently caresses the earth
as the bright day meets quiet death.

The magical throne returns to the Moon
the night will take over the world so soon.
The light of the Sun is now gone
as we all witness the Moon's dawn.

Author notes

Written August 30th, 2006 according to AllPoetry. An older piece of mine that was turned into a song by a friend. You can tell i love the magic of the night and the moon. I usually write free verse but my inspiration let the rhyme flow in this.

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  • Butterfly Beauty
    December 9, 2007

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    I love the mystical quality of this piece. You are very good at flowing rhyme. I can't do that. It sounds beautiful. You do capture the magic of the night and the moon. I liked all of it, but if I had to pick my favorite verse, it would be the first one. The Title/First line/Last line are crazy wild:

    "Dawn of the moon, Bring down the Sun as heaven screams, as we all witness the Moon's dawn." WOW.

    This reminds me of a song by Stevie Nicks, "Sisters of the Moon." I wouldn't change anything. I love it. Great write.


    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.