Down in the Bottoms a cello moaning
while cobwebby souls are hanging from trees.
Angels with clicking grey talons groaning—
down in the Bottoms a cello moaning,
notes of ashen regret, fall, intoning
the desperate moments when egos freeze.
Down in the Bottoms a cello moaning
while cobwebby souls are hanging from trees…
Please tell me what you think
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Kudos
Strict form is unfashionable these days and whenever I see it I expect the poetic thought of a poem to have suffered in what I call the 'shoe-horning' effect. To have accomplished this so tidily and maintained such pleasing poetic suggestion and subtlety is testament to your art, intellect and ability. Huge Kudos to you Brandon. >W< -
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Oh, I don't know
I really like formal poetry. I prefer it actually. Fashion is fickle. Form is testament of craft, and there is so little craftspeople left in the world of "fashionable" poetry. It seems to me the farthest people go from the very idea of shapeliness, control, and subtlety, the more they're applauded for being "avante garde" when all they're really doing is writing, not crafting. This isn't to say I have disdain for writers of free verse, because good writers of free verse also pay attention to craft, they just don't adhere to strict formal patterns. One still sees, however, attention to meter, imagery, etc.
Thank you for your kindness in your assessment. I've never tried a triolet before, and I'm always a little suspicious of poetic forms which involve so much refraining, though I love them, because they're so hard to pull off. I'm happy to read that you think I've done well.
Yours,
B.
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Hmmm.. sounds like it would do well as a song.......something slow....cowboyish
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Cowboyish?
Pas moi, madame! Though I do see what you mean about this working as a song, because that's basically what these are. Formal poetry was originally accompanied by lutes, harps, etc. Popular music has taken over this realm of poetics for better or for worse.
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Windhover
December 4, 2007