Couldn’t quite believe my senses
It all happened way too fast
No warning came, no Stop sign
Don’t know if it all can last
It sneaked right up and hit me
Leaving me standing without a hope
It hit me right between the eyes
Couldn’t figure out how to cope
If I’m every going to get through
Overcome the way this bent me
Understand you’ve left me delicate
So you’ll have to treat me gently…
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what i like about this is the lack of contrived rhyme, so common in anacrostics. nice job
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Thanks LD, means a lot coming from someone with your skills.
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I really like this poem. when you said "it all happened way too fast" you could tell that you had experienced love before and could believe this, its authentic. Right from the beginning I was sold on the story i was goin to read
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 3.
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Its a delicious poem
or rather acrostic to be technical lol....
I admire you for writing this for me.
I realise on this site ( SP ) they aren't big on the whole family thing, but well seeing as you were already Hubby on the other sites, it just can't be ignored just becuase your on this one now too
I feel honoured and I appreciate you so so much Joe
Wifey - Cindy
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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