The Air force
Flies its’ jets overhead
While I am mowing.
So I mow
The triangle
Of a pussy
Into my boyfriends’ lawn
And wait
To see
If their flying patterns change.
When I am done,
I show this
To my boy friend....
We stand there
On the deck,
Like proud parents,
And he asks me
Why I left
The Queen Ann’s Lace
So long on that edge.
I tell him
It is to make it
More realistic,
Like the wave picture
On my Bic lighter,
When it was really
To cover
The scar
On my left side.
If this works,
I am considering mowing
WAR NO MORE
Into the cornfield
Next door.
Maybe they will think
It was the Aliens
And pay attention.
Does this make me a feminist?
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Author notes
I wrote this while drinking and driving....a lawnmower
As deep as you want to go.......
Comments
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What is a feminist,a male chauvinst without balls or is it the other way round?
lets go all Freudian here for the hell of it...i think you were pissed,started to fantasise about pilots then in a vain attempt to realise your fantasy you decided to mow your pussy into the lawn,i dont think that makes you a feminist,it makes you a hot woman..either that or you are fed up with the predictability of virtually all men,this is the war you are fighting,
On the other hand it may be an anti-war poem
Loved the read as usual
rhetoricat
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I loved it!
I wondered where this one would go when I read the preview. Then I saw the catagories and decided to give it a read. I was not disappointed. I laughed out loud, quite literally, when I read your second stanza. Isn't it amazing from how far away most of us men can detect the hint of a glimpse of a pussy? It doesn't seem to matter how fast we are going either.
Trim the The Queen Ann's Lace as you see fit but rest assured I don't believe anyone, let alone a loving boyfriend, will begrudge a scar when such a beautiful lush lawn is before them.
I'm afraid that WAR NO MORE in the cornfield next door would only make the armed forces consider war on the aliens. They seem to hate being told what to do.
Does this make you a feminist? Is that a rhetorical question? I'll be the first man to admit I'm not the smartest guy in the group (depending on the group), yet even I don't think you can be a feminist and use the word pussy unless you're complaining about a man using the word pussy. Which by the way is one of my favorite words concerning the subject. I hope that doesn't make me seem like a male chauvinist pig.
I once mowed a tic tac toe board into the lawn because I was bored but this definately beats that hands down. I'm of a mind to wonder if any other landscaping played a part in the overall appearance of the scene. A well placed potted plant or perhaps a lawn gnome could draw attention from the eyes of many. Great write!
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Very interesting and good, and clever too. I like the idea alot and I've never read something like this. Maybe that's why but this poem seems very original (lack of a better word...) Nice!
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Funny
Very clever and funny. LOL. Birdie
language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 4.
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Humor, with a point
It's always interesting to note when the ideas pop in - I don't drink while driving a lawn mower, but after this, I may try it! Given what you COULD have mowed into your lawn, you could be a marketing agent for feminists.
tone: 4.
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This was a hoot.
I like the attitude here, in conjunction with the wry humor it's just right. This was funny, as odd as it was to see a woman write the word pussy(cuz you all hate that word), I just had to laugh. You got a real self-possessed way about you that makes your work entertaining, and well...I guess it's because I'm a smartass too.
Are you a feminist? No. No feminist would use the word "pussy", and she certainly wouldn't mow the objectification of a woman's body into a lawn in order to garner the attention of hopefully horny aviators looking to spy an errant erotic skyview peek at woman parts. You are a bad, bad girl and the feminists are going to scratch your eyes out. Now, what was your address? Oh, just mow it into your lawn with an invite as I am certain there are bound to be some airborn feminists soon that will be more than happy to alter course and descend upon your strollupy tripeness with scything abandon. You best be mowing your sins away soon lest you fall prey to their vengeance. Return to the nah-yah-yah sisterhood...
Now...the part about "war no more"? Very good, and made even better by the tongue-in-cheek humour about sex preceding it. Men will move the world and alter the course of tons of skyborne metal for a roll in the hay, yeah even a glimpse of such, but won't bother to change course to avoid death and destruction. I thought that was brilliant. I like your smartness, it's a good smartness and it's nice to have your smartness here at Sharepoetry. Even if you are toeing the line with your feminist sisters...
Nice work.
al
Was the mower a Snapper or a Lawn Boy?
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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