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My Wish

Oh how I long to remove this facade and cry,
To weep convicted tears that beg for freedom.
Oh how I beg to be wrapped in sheets of unknown reassurance
And share the taste of the soul of my skin.

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  • Gagiikwe
    January 31, 2008
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    I have read this several times, and am unsure how to comment, one way or another.
    J.G.


  • marcusmoore
    January 31, 2008

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    It seems you want to be forgiven for your sins, some sort of redemption, "I beg to be wrapped in sheets of uknown reassurance" "weep convicted tears that bef for freedom" freedom from your past and something you've done? IDK? I dont think I would change anything, you might want to come back later and maybe add more? explain maybe what it is and why? But i know nothing of poetry lol so...

    TTYL
    MM