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In the Quiet of Geons

the visual noise
has gone
the figures clear
shapes of geons---
cylinders and
rectangular blocks
building into a solid object
of graspable texture
and finite creation

like clean endings
and surprise-free
departures


sense perceived
without illusions
of space and light


You



standing amidst vastness
me
hiding beneath
lengthy words
and crowded thoughts
desiring to transform
my two letter existence
to the three independently
floating between stanzas
and whiteness.




say what you think.

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  • Lad
    February 6, 2008

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    The hymn, the hum, the search of a true poet's "you" - that gossamer something, some being, some reality, some emotion, some Geon", some fundamental identity "floating between stanzas / and whiteness", without palpable dimensions of "space and light" - trying to bridge the poetic gap between the two-letter me and the three-letter you - the "you" at the end of striving insight, the "you" that moves nearly ungraspable as liquid mercury, forever just out of reach of a poet's fingertipped words.

    That's what I sense in this marvel of subtlety, Iphios: the paradoxical clarity of what's wanted, invisible as it is, but ever seductive to the poet's yearning.
    The poem skilfully skips over the tops of words as though they were eggshells, easily damaged. But she takes the chance, "desiring" some ultimate discovery of meaning.

    Terrific! Pure. Clean. The apex of ephemeral. The relentless exploration for "you".

    Lad

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    • iphios
      February 6, 2008
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      It been a while since i have truly written a poem. I wrote this inspired by the concept of geons. And as i wrote this i was struck by a need to play with words, hence the structure and lines.
      There is nothing i need to do to explain this poem Lad. You see through it clearly. And yes the exploration is relentless.

      -iphios


  • ladydwarf
    February 9, 2008

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    i am trully feeling illiterate this evening. had to look up geons.........have read this several times but must admit had to read Lad's comment to get a good idea. definitly worth the extra time however........broke my brain a bit but understanding better now. "me
    hiding beneath
    lengthy words
    and crowded thoughts" love that line! dont we all sometimes? ok i am going to go read jack and jill or something now and rest! this wore me out, lol! beautiful write! LD

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    • iphios
      February 9, 2008
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      Haha. The jack and jill bit just made me laugh. Thanks LD for taking the time to figure this little poem out. The fact you came back to this was flattering enough. On the lines mentioned im glad you liked it. I worked on that bit a little more.

      Thanks again

      -iphios