Poems as Picasso’s work
disjointed
abundantly
severed
aggressively -
a Guernica of words.
Contrapuntal adjectives in line proceed at pace
pronoun lite
adverb rich
dark and light amorously entwined
round some central point -
deliberately askew.
Addictively
absurd -
a Serengeti of the mind.
James Gagiikwe © 2008
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Why is the title a question?
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I read this before but never got to comment as things have taken me away from this site for quite some time. Why is the title a question? Because the poem begs to ask what makes poetry, poetry.In the same vein that Picasso's abstract art could be considered art. I have a nagging feeling im way off here, but that's how i read this. The poem itself in structure and form is different from the usual, it is abrupt and choppy but works. And the choppy words create a wholeness that is best appreciated when we thrive to read through it before judging. Interesting poem, suits my current mood of exploring the different 'shapes' of poetry.
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Hi, J.G.
Addictive, absurd, a deliberately askew central point somewhere, a primal animal reserve in Tanzania, a zoo for language in all its parts, but mainly adjectives and nouns, broken, cut, slashed - is this poetry? Yes, indeed. Is Picasso's bleeding rage over what Franco's Fascists did to the peasants, poetry? Yes to that too. For me anyway, whether in words or paint, "some central point - deliberately askew" is the creative, non-literal use of symbols to reach into feelings which reach into the mind which reaches into various meanings, many resonances.
Helluva good poem: both Picasso's and yours, and a third one: both blended together.
Best!
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Lad
Hello Cleveland,
Actually, I thought your comment more peotic than the poem!
Your comment [less the praise!!] should be in the poetry text books! Classic! Must be the teacher in you! Beautiful summary of poetry in general.
Hohohoho. "a zoo for language"! In what cage could we possibly fit The Jabberwok?
"mainly adjectives and nouns"; I like better than my pronouns and adverbs; may I steal it for some future poem?
The poem wasn't meant as a comment on Picasso's Guernica; but meant to use Guernica as a recognizable illustration.
It was only after I imported the picture that I realised how fitting it all was. However I'm glad I didn't try for a picture of the Serengeti Plain; as that would have been too narow an association; and I much prefer your zoo for language.
Bye
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Hee hee...great reply, J.G. May you use "mainly adjectives and nouns"? Well, as the Three Stooges' wonderful Curly would say: "Soytenly!"
I must, though, draw the line at "a zoo for language", as I'm now writing a poem up with that phrase in it. Sorry. If you are so bold as to steal that, I and my greedy lawyer will beat you to death with...adverbs and pronouns, no less. Ha!
Hey, I really liked "Poetry?" It's nifty to read a GOOD POEM, whether on or off the site. Hence, I'll be back for more.
Cheers, my good man -
Lad, freezing in goddam Cleveland. -
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Lad
OK, OK! Keep the zoo; any way, zoos have bars and cages. I much prefers parks where the people are in the [mobile] cages and the animals watch them. I guess we will have to invent an interactive genre of poetry where the poem reads the reader.
Ah, the 3 Stooges. I liked their 1930's films the best. And the Curly-Joe replacement for Curly never had the timing right, I felt.
But seriously, your comment was an excellent philosophy of poetry.
Just to rub it in....its 100 degrees here today. I gues we could use some cold, if it carries rain.
JG
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Why is the title a question?, I don't know lol, why?
Oddly enough when I read this it reminded me of a poem Kiddy read, then I saw her comment and laughed cause yeah, ironic lol
I really enjoyed reading this, strong language. Gave a punch having some words there only the one word to the line etc I loved the ending in particular James, the creative perfect wording-- addictively absurd
Cindy
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Ha ha... How different people's views are... I wrote a poem on this same topic, a kinda of listy poem that lists out all that is considered poetry... I don't know why, this poem reminds me of Dr.Johnson's Dictionary...could you guess why, dear G?
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one...
Thanks for sharing...
Love
-Kiddy
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Ms. Kiddy
Hi K,
Sorry 'virtual daughter & general instructor' but you are more literate than I. I don't understand your reference to Dr. Samuel Johnson. Give me a clue, please.
JG
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