Multi-hued changeling
displaying beauty yet
mistress of disguise
masquerading innocence
your rolling eyes
take in
everything
stealthy after prey
waiting frozen
motionless
till movement blurs
from speed
quickly tongued you
capture me –
Woman
you are the ultimate
Chameleon
James Gagiikwe © 2008
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My wife liked it
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I'm not surprised she did
it's elegantly erotic. Ho ho! and not even in an Adult category. Best RA -
haha
Yes, I find this true in many ways, women can capture us without us even knowing it, before we even realize we are under their spell. I thought it was a great metaphor, the whole poem, if i'm right, if not I still enjoyed it. Style works well with the flow, I believe centering it also helped out. I liked the ending, I think leaving the last phrase alone gave it more power, very nice write, it was a pleasure, Look forward to more
TTYL
MM
language: 4, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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marcusmoore
MM,
The depth and breadth, the diversity of each person is always a mystery and a delight. To participate in another person's life is a privilege.
To be 'captured' before we realise is an even greater mystery; and lots of fun.
Yes, the metapjor was meant to extend thru the whole poem.
JG
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Hi, J.G.
Shape-shifters aren't all bad, and neither are tigresses on the hunt, even for men, even with burning bright, kaleidoscopic, "rolling eyes". For me, the poem brings Blake up to date, making that "fearful symmetry" a woman the poet is enthralled by. Nice work, James.
Everything works - taut lines, internal rhymes, carefully picked words, action, sweet conflict. "Till movement blurs / from speed" is terrific. No wonder your wife likes this one - the seductive animalness of it. The love.
Best!
Lad -
"changeling" is one of my favorite words...sounds like a woman turned on someone.....I can see the chameleon in this piece and feel the quick change she did...quickly lashing tongue...this is great, Gagii! LD
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