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walking

redundant
again and again
in treadmillic motion
counter-locomotion
feet pacing permanent
perpetual re-placement
forward-stepping backwards
doubling-back morewards
again and again
i've been here
i am here
pathologically musing
nowhere.














































Author notes

i can't write this assigned essay. it was due yesterday. among other things...

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  • iphios
    February 20, 2008
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    canvass


  • Gagiikwe
    February 15, 2008

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    Nice Rap Rhythm

    Ah, invented some new words have we. Interesting.
    treadmillic - similar to a treadmill.
    morewards - more backwards than forewards.

    Counter-locomotion is interesting also, suggesting moving backwards. Goes well with counter-intuitive, counter-balance, and counter-clockwise. All of which this poem is.
    Nice work.

    language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 1, tone: 3, form: 3.