I think of you,
When time is slowing,
Whenever I'm bored,
With nothing to do,
I think of you.
I talk to you,
'Cause I know I'll laugh,
Or at the least smile.
When I get the chance,
I talk to you.
I look at you,
Wonder what you're thinking,
Hope it's of me,
Make sure you don't see, when
I look at you.
You smile at me,
And can't believe you did,
I get excited and do it back,
Tell myself it means nothing...
When you smile at me.
Comments
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Lovely
It's simple, yet full of material. You pulled this off well. I like how you set this up and how you kind of repeated the first and last line of each verse. Sometimes that doesn't work, but it does with this.
Well done,
Ashley -
Very nice,
I like how the stanzas start with you thinking “ I think of you, I talk to you, I look at you,” and in the last stanza she reacted “You smile at me”
A vary enchanting love poem filled with passion. A very nice read
Bill
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great
that is an awesome poemlanguage: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 3.
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