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My Pencil

sometimes
i look at my pencil
one side is white
the other brown
and they come together at the tip
sometimes
i wish the world was like that
different people
joining togrther
to do one job
just like
th pencil did
to help me write this down
You can call it a cheap pencil
but i say its the best there is
it shows how we should be
you can say there is no way
we can learn that from a pencil
but i say its the greastest lesson
we have yet to learn

i like it a lot

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Comments


  • skipeople
    February 16, 2008
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    You seem very observant and that's cool.

    I can only agree, though it isn't bad like years ago with segragation.

    I like this poem though. I think that if you keep writing, you'll get even better.

    Try using spell check too.

    Keep up the good work!
    Ashley

    p.s. Your dog is cute. Well atleast your picture, if it isn't your dog...=]