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Two Eyes

Two are the eyes
I have since birth
But seeing the same
no different views?

God, can't I see
in two different sides?

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  • Mark McNulty
    March 18, 2008

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    Very cool and playful in a neat way. It is short, not so simple, but very effective. I had to pause and consider it for a moment and then it brought on the smile. A neat little effective ditty. Good work!

    language: 3, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 5.