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Bleeding love

Bleeding Love












Maintaining, bleeding
this intensified love.

Each beat,
each passing moment we coexist.

Our bond strengthened,
devotion unbreakable.

Um I don't know speak the truth lol :)

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  • Muhammad Shanazar
    March 15, 2008

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    Love is nothing more than it is expressed in the poem. Fortunate are those who get love in response of love.
    Muhammad Shanazar


  • Colton Macy
    March 17, 2008

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    it was great!

    haha so much in so little...reminds me of the six word story that authors are told to write. haha very nice and the subject...


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      March 17, 2008
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      Thanks...I like short but sweet sometimes, specially this little effort




      Cindy


  • NewYorker
    March 17, 2008

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    Interesting

    This has a flow and I admitt despite the fact that it's short it's sweet! I love it. It's cute and sweet and (more or less) to the point. Good job!
    Brooklyn

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  • Mark McNulty
    March 17, 2008

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    Very nice...

    I also agree that getting a lot from a little can be the greatest of challenges at times. Here, I see a wide scope of love in a committed relationship captured nicely. I don't think the full essence of a loving relationship and all that it means could ever be captured in 17 words. We can only hope to focus on one special part of the experience and share it in a meaningful way. Clearly, that is what I believe you have done in this poem. Good work and I hope it wins the contest. Having never entered one, I do not even know if a "winner" is picked or what the prize is.... but good luck! Happy St. Patrick's Day!

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    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      March 18, 2008
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      Hi there Mark

      thanks a lovely comment as always


      Yes winners are picked...in this case I didn't win , becuase she was asking for noon-cliched and well I sturggled with that when I normally don't ...but I think indeed that had to do with more of the having to get it in 17 words lol.

      And when becoming a winner etc...all we win is trpophies & points which is okay...i use the points to feature like on here and to hold my own contests

      Happy St Patty's to U to Mark



      Cindy


  • Kiddy
    March 19, 2008

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    Heartfelt take on the prompt, Cindy.
    Though few words, this poem has more to say about my love for my better-half, Vijay... sometimes this kinda read, poems about true love, love lyrics and the like have always made me go so sentimental taking me to the world that is entirely lovely and beautiful... I guess I am out of words and what I have in heart right away is something inexplicable...
    Thanks for sharing...
    Love
    -Kiddy

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