Rose Play Gift Trap...
How can this be poetry?
Just random words tossed about,
without any sense of time or place.
Disconected and lacking meaning,
scattered without care,
without a plan,
with no set direction in the least.
But maybe that is poetry after all.
Just silly, ignorant children
trying to make sense of
random
meaningless
magnetic
phrases.
Unplanned and totally scattered,
with fatigued hope their only tool.
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Author notes
Okay. This was the search for inspiration. I felt like I wanted to write a poem but had nothing moving me to do so... total blank. So, I asked myself "what does poetry look like?" Off I went to Google. Clicked images. Type 'poetry' and see what image is on top. This was it, the #1 image for the word poetry. And, what you read here, is the little poem that poured out over the next 5 minutes. A "quick write" in the truest sense of the term... but I wanted to keep it that way. Sometimes I like seeing what comes out in a short blast of time, rather than thinking too much about it.
So... what do you think?
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Sounds like Dada...
Tristan Tzara and that bunch started the cut-up movement that William Burroughs latched onto later , where they wrote a piece and then cut it up into pieces and randomly put it back in a different order (and called it poetry) I think we can make poetry out of randomly selected words and phrases but with some thought to placement. This may not be related but when I was teaching three year olds in China I had two sets of magnetic letters, poured them out onto a large table and gave them a word to spell and they had to fish through the pile and when they found the right letters, in order, they each would come up to the whiteboard and set them up. Not poetry, but it might as well have been for the delight they had in accomplishing the task.
"fatigued hope their only tool" is worth a poem in itself Mark. Cheers, MJ -
This one is droll and intriguing as all get out, Mark, sort of like a "gift rose play"ing us into a "trap" - the imaginary and sometimes self-revealing trap of random words, which, with lots of imagination, can become something beautiful, although they often don't.
But your poem here is a beautiful thing: it ponders the frailty of black scribbles on paper - in other words, words - and how fragile and inadequate those inky symbols are to capture something deep within a poet's inner life. "Unplanned and scattered" for sure, but sometimes that's exactly what our inner life is at times, and random words put together, despite our "fatigued hope," might just mean something we haven't yet figured out.
Well, that's my poetic optimism speaking here, Mark, and it's brought out by this probing, quick-write poem. Really nice work! or I should say...play, which, for me, is what writing poetry should be all about.
Later...
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Thanks, Lad. I am glad you enjoyed this fun little ditty. I enjoy it quite a bit myself. It was rather satisfying to have nothing, then end up with this a short time later. It was fun, and I am always among those that believe writing should always be fun in some way, shape, or form. Even at those times when it is a form of therapy, you can still find the fun it. Thanks!
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Hi Mark
This is a good one... actually explains the state of a poets mind. Would not say that it is always in this state though.. agree to it.
Gr8 stuff...
Travellerlanguage: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Thanks for taking the time to comment, LT. I am glad you liked it. I agree, too, that the poetic mind is not always in this state... it certainly is an ever-changing beast.
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different and nice
This is such wonderful stuff!A new angle to poetry by itself..some random stuff and there flows the poem out of the poet's head!!This is great work and I really liked it.I immensely enjoyed the flow of words..though there is no theme to the poem in particular you have managed to bring it all together and weave a wonderful poem out of the disconected words...Good job Mark!
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Thanks for the great comment. I am glad you enjoyed this so much and happy to receive such positive feedback. It helps keep my fingers typing!
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Inspiration comes from the most unique things. Though its interesting how such a picture connects to poetry.I like the conclusion you drive at, yes, maybe these random words is poetry. In its wholeness and seemingly disjointed thought lies meaning. For as poets we seem to jumble up words in search of something....
There's this poetry exercise used for kids called "found poetry" where random words are placed in a box and you pick one word after the next to form a poem. And somehow in that randomness we find laughter and in 'fatigue hope'...we may find meaning.
A quirky approach to poetry and a good little exercise for those in search of inspiration.
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this piece. Yes, it was a quirky and fun exercise to do, just as using those magnets can be. As always, I am thankful for the feedback...
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