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No Hope

So hard to live,1

When everything is being ripped apart,2

when there is no hope,3

no wish,4

nothing.5

You just sit there,6

thinking, thinking.7

No hope induicates no life.8

A world without hope is nothing. 9

When life brings you hope you just throw it away.10

You don't listen to your concience,11

You don't listen to your heart either,12

You do what others tell you.13

Is that a life worth living?14

Your there,15

But at the same time your not.16

You look at yourself from a diffrent angle.17

An angle were you see your not the best.18

Your not the worst either,19

But you don't like yourself anymore.20

You keep telling yourself your ugly.21

That everybody around you is for buetifull than you.22

You lose hope.23

Is that a life worth living?24

Think about yourself25

Is there a way to improve?26

A way to make others happy but at the same time make you happy also?

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Reviews

  • emma1703
    March 23, 2008

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    Hey there! Surprised no one has commented this beutiful poem. So many girls aka boys feel like this. They look at themselvs in a bad angle. im sos urprised some one wrote this poem because i know soo many feel like this. I love this poem, one of my fav. The nr. were they apart of the poem? I didnt feel like you needed them at all, but if you like them there keep it there Oh and becareful with the commas some lines have commas then you swap to a fullstop and then go over to nothing, so fix that. Oh and i <3 the way the setup of the poem is... xxx


  • SecretKeeper365
    March 28, 2008

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    One of the best

    Truth no matter how harsh must be told. I like that what you wrote is a wake up call to every person out there who sees themselves that way. I know I do. The way I see it your poem is perfectly clear with its meaning although you do have some grammer and spellling errors in stanza 22 it should be more beautiful. Then again I could be being a compleate ditz and it was supposed to be that way. LOL! Anyway thank you for being an eye opening writer! :') I'll share this with all my friends.


  • ocalamity
    March 29, 2008
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    I get the feeling this poem is directed towards yourself; very moving. Its plain that you use your poetry to work out your own thoughts, and thats exactly the point of it all. Just watch the use of "your" vs. "you're." Otherwise, I really enjoyed it.