There is more to me than what you see
Eye never a window to my soul
Pain the only possession in plenty
The smiling inocence never believable
All a fleeting mirage
Indeed, there is
Much much
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I was inspired by Cindy's nonet which I came across the other day...since then I had been wanting to spin out one..and lo behold!here it is!! If I have not mistaken I think Mark McNulty too had published a nonet.That too inspired me Thanks ppl!!
My first try of a nonet..How has it turned out??
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nonet-sonet-bonet...?
I'm not that taken up with forms, I just like what you did with your idea. more than meets the eye. My favorite line is "Pain the only possession in plenty" nice twist. and the last four lines have a smooth inevitability to them. I like the wry quality to the poem. A huge persoality packed into very few words. It looks like Cindy's, but I don't know the ground rules. I'd say it turned out really well whatever you want to call it. Cheers, MJ -
catchy
indeed, indeed, you are not the only one Cindy has inspired...
Pap
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Okay... I think Cindy did a fine job going over the technical side of things so I am not going to dwell on that. Also, unless I have lost my memory, I have not composed a nonet myself. I am eager to try one, though, now that I see Cindy's explanation. Thank you for mentioning me and I am truly flattered if anything I write inspires someone else in any way, but I did not write a nonet as of this moment. I may later tonight, though.
NOW, as for the poem, I really liked it. Nonet or not nonet, it struck a chord with me and felt very human. I relate to this poem so intently because I am one who naturally hides much of my own self. There is plenty I do not open up to others, and I can't even explain why. I really enjoyed reading it and thought it was very good, even if it is not "technically" a nonet.
language: 4, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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thanks!
Hey Mark!
Im so glad that you took your time to read my poem and comment on it saying you liked it
Oh!I think I mistook you for having written a nonet before!
To be really honest I love all your poems Mark!Am a true admirer of all your works
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Thanks for those kind and supportive words... they are much appreciated.
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It's a great first attempt at a nonet
I love the title and the subject of there being much much more to you...I feel that way about myself sometimes lol
But onto the technical side of things --
This isn't technically true form of a nonet
Here is the breakdown of a Nonet --
This is in the style of a “Nonet”.
A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line seven syllables, etc... until line nine that finishes with one syllable. It can be on any subject and rhyming is optional. line 1 - 9 syllables
line 2 - 8 syllables
line 3 - 7 syllables
line 4 - 6 syllables
line 5 - 5 syllables
line 6 - 4 syllables
line 7 - 3 syllables
line 8 - 2 syllables
line 9 - 1 syllable
where you have gone wrong is...each line doesnt have the required amount of syllables...they are all over the place..
The reaosn why it's needed to stick to an exact syllable number per line, is it shows the absolute true rhythm to the piece
the first line is fine
the second has 9 syllables when it should have 8
third has 10 syllables when it should have 7
So as you can see it needs some work to be a perfect nonet, but it is off to a good start. I really hope you dont take this all the wrong way, I only point out etc to help you improve and grow into the best poet you can be
I always use this website to check the syllables etc, as well even I can't do it perfect in my head all the time lol so have a look if you like
http://www.wordscount.info/hw/syllable.jsp
So if you spend some time with it..please send me a link for the edited version when your done and I would love to come back again
Cindy
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 3.
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Ooops!!
Looks like I have got the syllables thingy all messed up!!I am so glad that you could review the poem and render your comments that were a real eye-opener to me.I will definitely work on the poem and make sure its onthe right track in becoming a nonet.Once I do that I shall get back to youRight now am a bit busy but will work on it as soon as possible.The link you provided is real helpful.
Once again, thanks a loot Cindy
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