Goodbye
to failures
Goodbye
to broken dreams
Goodbye
to friends and lovers
Goodbye
to me.
Goodbye
to dear pets
Goodbye
to parents
Goodbye
to teachers
Goodbye
to me.
Goodbye
to hopleless feelings
Goodbye
to my nothings
Goodbye
to all my haters
Goodbye
to me.
Goodbye
to me.
Reviews
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Well first of all,you write wonderfully
I wont say everythink will be oki etc because i do not know you, but i can say this: You write very nice my friend. you have a poetic feel yo the poem..and its relatable cuz of the teenage feeling in it
well don, just checking ur other poems would be nice if you commented some of mine
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Hey, get back here...
After you've sorted things out you can say Hello, I'm sorry. As a poem this works well, good flow, all except for the second line. The "almost" seems awkward, "failures" by itself works better with the rest of the piece, everything is short, concise, laconic. There's a small inkling of caring when you say "Goodbye to me" because it assumes the presence of the other, an other, so like I said sort it out and get back on the scene, I don't think you've left anyway. Cheers, MJ -
this is damn good
I like your poem. I really have a thing for poems with very few words on the lines. but your makes since and has a good flow and ending. hey cool, you became a member on my B-day. rad. lol it was destiny. ha. later -
This is a very unique poem. I like the way you write.. Thank you for all the inspiring comments you left on my page, i appriciate it!!
March 26, 2008
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