I have never been the other woman
But today I sit and I am
She is the one you kiss and hug
She is the one you fuck and say you love
But I am the one she doesn’t know about
The one you talk to and still care about
The one you share your feelings with
But not all your feelings because I feel the shift
You start to talk but pull back inside
You want to fly but don’t know how to handle the ride.
Should I feel bad or sad for her?
As a woman to another should I care for her?
How would she feel if she knew?
I do care (when I think I am the other woman)
But I feel bad for me too
Do you think about me when your with her?
Do you think about our love and inside say “I miss her”?
You have told me I am a vivid memory
But, I am not in the past anymore
You found me
And I am a supporting role in this story
Am I the other woman?
No not possible in my eyes
I am the original, the distinctive, the fantastic
Adapted from your words
I am your angel, so you used to say
I am here now and I am not going away
You live on one side and I’m on the other
The world is so wide and I don’t know how we can be with each other
But no matter the distance, the relationships, the time
I am the original woman
The title of other woman – is not mine
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hey free from hiding
at first i was saying hey it sounds like you are the other woman but then i realized were talking about prespective her and as you cleverly point out a women is never the other woman, she's the other women. well stated, direct and unapolegetic. my only critique is i think you tried to throw in a few rhymes which this doesnt' need, the last two lines in the first stanze in particular which seemed forced and didnt really add anything viable.
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thanks dave
thank you for your comments I really needed to get this outthere in the world and this was the only place I thought I could. I do like rhymes - but the flying part is meaningful he is all the way on the other side of the country and (never) feels he will be able to move - he doesn't know how to handle that idea. But I agree it may have been forced. Thanks again I really appreciate any comment.
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Does not mince words
Well you really can tell that you poured your heart into your poem. I really like your honesty, and the perspective you offer. I don't get the feeling that you are being one sided or unrealistic, on the contrary you are fair with all parties-Him, and the "other woman" but still find a way to express your feelings. I wish you the best! -
Less can be more
Hello Freedom , and thanks for sharing your feelings here. There will be mixed feelings toward someone in your position, I don't intend to discuss that as I don't believe that's our business here, but I wish you luck nonetheless as you're going to need it, whatever happens.
Poetically I think you express your passion and an often overlooked truth about the 'other woman's' perspective so the poem has merit and will win you sympathy, whatever that may be worth. Of course writing it was cathartic for you and it serves that purpose too. But on a technical note I think it's rather too long and meandering to hold a neutral's attention, and that you could make the points much more succinctly and effectively. I copied and pasted it and (forgive my presumption) fairly hacked it down to this (still all your own words bar one)
I have never been the other woman
until today
I am the one she doesn’t know about
Do you think about me when your with her?
Do you think about our love and inside say “I miss her”?
Am I the other woman?
No not possible in my eyes
I am the original, the distinctive, the fantastic
I am your angel, so you used to say
I am here now and I am not going away
no matter the distance, the relationships, the time
I am YOUR woman
The title of 'other woman '–
is not mine
Just something to consider. Enjoyed the poem and welcome to the site. >W< -
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you made it a poem
wow you really worked in into a poem. I guess my poetry is really a free write. I don't edit it or work on it I just write it as I feel it and what comes out is just that. Thanks for the excellent edit.
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i love this girl... so real so true.... i really love it, my favourite part is... I am the original woman....to is not mine...
April 21, 2008