Are you still happy
about us?
I'm not,
I guess.
I used to feel
tingles
holding your hand
but now it's just
hand.
Is that an
indication?
It scares me to death
to watch the clouds
and see
clouds.
Shouldn't I be seeing
cotton candy?
thoughts, please?
Comments
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I like how everything you are saying is real and exactly how it is until you say cotton candy (which I love) it just ends with poem with a playful twist to a nonplayful and serious poem.
subject: 5.
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Romantic
Hey Scribbler!
Shouldn't you be seeing soaring galleons and mighty towers?
Shouldn't the petal of each word be contriving a wonderful bouquet
of scribbledflowers?
You're such an old Romantic!
This was nice and concise - but does it mean it's over between us?
Good to see your face in the place! x >W< -
I really like that thought...shouldn't I be seeing cotton candy?
This was an easy to feel poem.
I think maybe you should have but now it's just a hand...instead of just hand etc
I felt the questioning and the emotion and think it's a tight piece.
Cindy
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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