Forever One

The summer breeze still sings the tune that played when we first met. Two silly children holding hands and sharing laughs as twilight’s shadows danced. We were stalking after seagulls, never dreaming we could fail. Partners in crime, you and I, lost in the simplest bond. The sun did set and no gull was caught, yet that glowing warmth never died. It took control, it filled my heart, and always kept me by your side. Now time has passed and we’ve both changed, our hands still locked in love. We’ve shared a lifetime. We've dreamed a future. But I’ll never stray beyond that scene. You and I, always one. Smiling. Laughing. Loving. Forever chasing seagulls along our neverending shore.

Author notes

I wrote this for a contest on AP, based on the pic and the theme "forever". The only difference in that one is I combined "Smiling... laughing... loving" into one line just to get it down to 25 lines. Let me know what you think... thanks!

Here is a credit for the great pic that was used:
http://trixypixie.deviantart.com/art/forever-83233351

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• kittykat9597
  April 25, 2008
  
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  awsome

  great poem,it reminds me of my husband and I.We met when I was 14 and that was 14 years ago....anyway...wonderfully written

  
• joolzfoolz
  April 25, 2008
  
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  How lovely!!! To take young love and keep it still alive is fantastic. I would ask you to marry me but I think you're already a bit busy in that arena, and, thankfully, so am I. :-)
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  Goin 2 Ashes
  April 25, 2008
  
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  Great

  Not only very uplifting with a refreshing happy ending (although I'm guilty of writing mostly dark poetry). If only life were really like your poem!. But life is enoughlike it to make me want to stick around. BTW- technically good with good imagery and rhythms. Thaks for thisone.
  
  Rich

  language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.