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i call you Abba

it can't be labeled
God - the one syllable word
is just a concept

































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  • iphios
    April 23, 2008

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    Hey Pap,
    Your haikus have been interesting, almost like riddles. I suppose "god" is too generic, 'a one syllable word (that's) just a concept' and Abba/Father would give it more meaning, gives it the idea of relationship. All of that said in three lines and minimal syllabus. Anyway, this worked for me. For such ideas, the Haiku form is apt: say little, mean more.

    -iphios


    • Papyrus
      April 23, 2008
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      "god" is love / light

      iphios,

      thanx for noticing my haikus lately. it's really been my first attempts at them. and i'm not prone to write in structure, but this is something i've been wanting to do for a while.

      anyhow, you're right, "god" is too generic. there's so much behind that word. too much to give it a name. idk.

      i'm not saying Abba is a better word. but a loving father is what "god" has seemed like to me. unfortunately, i often feel that i'm the prodigal son. at least then i know that my father is very forgiving.

      Pap