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A Summer Night

I feel my clothes cling
as sweat traces my body's outline.
i taste the salty tears of my flesh
licking away those that touch my thin lips.
i breathe steady, feeling summer's
humid kiss
feeling summer's
hungry lips.

sighing
i feel the shortness of a breeze
temporal and fleeting
rushing across my hot flushed face
and olive skin,
basking beneath the seasons' night
i run my finger,
connecting stars to memories
of days no end,
of days like this.

reflections of heat passing
like steam from touching skin---
haunting this rainless skies
of empty words that rush through
our starving hearts
and consummate loneliness

sighing
i walk to saltine waters
cold and deep
washing the sweet smell of you
from my burning skin
i run my fingers
'round eternity, forgetting
the days of no end
the days like this:


hot
humid
and consuming.



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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    April 26, 2008
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    Well great descriptions/imagery..
    And I liked that it was turned around..

    I simply loved the fact thatmany could think it has a naughtier edge to it...thats pure creativity on your part.

    Throughly enjoyed this and can't wait for my next visit to the beach now




    Cindy

    . Rewarded 6


    • iphios
      April 27, 2008
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      Hey Cindy,
      Thanks for the read and the comment. I didn't notice that it had a naughtier edge, but when you pointed it out i can see what you mean. i guess summer heat does have that feel to it, doesn't it?

      -iphios

  • dave ochs
    April 26, 2008

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    hey iphios

    very well done, to me this was a summer nite of youth, like summer of 42 (a movie) when your younger summer days are eternel. don't know if was a typo but i think ski's should be sky.
    dave

    . Rewarded 4


    • iphios
      April 27, 2008
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      Hey dave,

      good to know this worked. Thanks. I haven't seen the movie you mentioned, i should check it out.

      -iphios


  • celestialpie
    April 27, 2008

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    Very nice, Iphios. We haven't had much spring here-- there's been continued cold and rain, even though it's almost May. We're all longing for summer-- this poem was like a vacation to some wonderful equatorial clime. I like how it builds slowly, languorously, and the repetition of "days of no end, days like this." And I LOVE "saltine waters"-- perfect image.

    Overall, a pleasant escape for this shivering midwesterner.

    -Pie


    • iphios
      April 27, 2008
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      It's good to hear from you Pie. I'm not much of a summer person, but i do think its better than the freezing cold. Thanks for stopping by this poem and for LOVING 'saltine waters.'

      Hope this made you slightly warm in the cold midwestern weather.

      -iphios