She was,
What I felt everytime I cried
She was what I held
when I felt dead inside
she was
she was
and all I wanted
was for her to be mine
but I said goodbye
and she said goodbye
and now it's goodbye
for the last time
goodnight
and goodbye
I walk alone
Tears I can't cry
I hide
locked inside
always inside
my dying mind
I cry
I still see her in my dreams
Sometimes at night
I'm afraid just to go to sleep
cause she'll be there
she's everywhere I go
held in my heart
and I just can't get her out
sometimes I try to tear it apart
but she's
the main conponent of my life
she's the reason I started to live
and not just only survive
and it's in her eyes
in her eyes
A feeling she lays inside
a feeling cutting so deep like knives
but it makes me feel alive
makes me feel alive
ta da. angst.............
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this one was good too =]
i think that you could put a couple of changes to the words to make it flow better but just in two lines ya know? like, "A feeling she lays DEEP inside" and then another, "and not only just TO survive" =] there ya go but this one was AMAZING!!!! XD
~anna
language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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very, very awesome
so very much like my ex and me.....
i love the lines:
"she's the reason I started to live
and not just only survive"
those hit really close to home
amazing poem
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ooo forgot the clappys sorry my bad
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wow
this is really good, I enjoyed reading you are a good writer I liked how you wrote each line it was cool. Nice poem keep up the good work.
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