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Lies and knifes, but not kites

Lies..........

pressed in by knifes.....

she won't answer my "why's".......

Watch her laugh, as she, cries.......
But inside she dies....
And all this
All this, is derived.....
from to less of " hi's"
and too many " goodbyes".......

so she hides
deep inside.....
and so she dies
Do I?
Do I?

And all those nights
bruised with all our fights
Do I?
Do I?
reach out my hand
reach out my love
but she only bites
Do I?
I I I .......

I'm so afriad of heights
And when she turns off the lights
Am I wrong am I right
It's just tonight
So Do I ?
Do I?
Do I?
Tonight
Tonight
Do I?

Author notes

soooooooo....this poem has a direcion...but it's more of a song, it's a bit confusing as a poem

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Comments


  • XxTearsHaveFallenxX
    April 30, 2008

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    Wow

    This was a really nice piece I enjoyed it a lot. YOu are a really good writer if you thought of this like really fast cause it takes me forever to write a poem to tell the reader how I feel. I like to put my emotion into the piece so while the reader is reading my piece they can feel what I am feeling as I read it. Very well done buddy. YOu put a lot of emotion into and I enjoyed reading. keep up the great work and talk to you later.

    Sincerely your friend,
    Chandra .C.


  • Dirty and Broken
    April 29, 2008

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    i like this
    i like it as a song or a poem
    the only line that was...weird was
    "from to less of " hi's""
    that line is awkward and confusing
    otherwise, i really liked it