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won out

I am going......
A little bit insane,
A little bit crazy
and this mind of mine
is spinnin'
and the good inside ain't winnin'
All these thoughts are taking over
All these feelings I feel are all of her
And this should have gone away........
but I woke up with the same urge of yesterday

She taught me so many things..
like how to fly
and how to cry
and now she's teaching me a new trick
and it's
how to die
I won't ask why
I'll just tell my self a lie
Say that she loves me
Say that she'll hear my plea
maybe one day
or not
Say she must be crazy
But she'll still be my baby
Maybe
Just maybe

Author notes

by the way, it's not done yet, I'll have to finnish it tomorrow.

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Comments


  • damsel
    May 19, 2008
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    Wow!

    I'm so srry....I see why your writing is depressing....You've been hurt by the girl that means everything to you.....And I'll bet that you're still in love with her.....If I could, I would take all the pain you feel, and make it disappear.....You're so nice....no one deserves to feel the emotion running through this....I do love this poem.


  • LiveLaugh
    May 11, 2008

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    Wow, this is an awesome poem! I love it so much, It flows nicely and I just love everything about it. Keep up the good work.

    Emily


  • Dirty and Broken
    May 1, 2008

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    this would make a really good song, in my opinion
    it's really pretty, though full of sorrow....i love it


  • XxTearsHaveFallenxX
    May 1, 2008

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    WOW buddy

    Why is it that your so good at this stuff. I loved your poem again of course your like awesome lol. I like each stanza. I really loved the last stanza because it was really really good and it like hit me really hard. I often feel like that and I feel like that now I wish it would go away but it will never until I take it away myself. I would leave it the way it is because the last stanza sounds like a good ending to the piece but what ever you have to finish will probably be really good. Cause your awesome. Anyway love the piece can't wait to read it again when it is finished. I will have to reply again like edit this one when you get it finished.

    Sincerely your extremo emo buddy,
    Chandra .c.


    xoxoxoxox lol.

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.