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sometimes

Sometimes
I see everything
While sometimes
I forget
to open my eyes
Sometimes
I can take it all in easily
And sometimes
I forget to breathe....
And I say " I love you"
While sometimes
I lie when I do
Sometimes I could make the lies true
sometimes......


I'm walking cold
In pouring rain
Trying to wash off
all of my pain
Trying to hide
all of this shame
Trying to shake
All of this blame
I'm heading somewhere
That I cannot name
Trying to control urges
ThatI cannot tame
I'm here in this place
I don't know how I came
But everyday
I feel the same

Walking in cirlces
With this weight on my shoulders
A weight I thought I already overcame
Sometimes I just
can't take this place
Put the finger
to the trigger
and point
and aim

I wish it was that fast
A click to blow away the past
I wish this feeling would last
But I get scared of the blast

Sometimes I scare myself so much...
but it's never enough.........

And sometimes
I can see everything
While sometimes
I forget
To open my eyes
And sometimes
It's just too much to take in
but sometimes
you just
have to begin

Author notes

okay, comment your hands off!!

I'm really not too thrilled with it

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Comments


  • damsel
    May 9, 2008

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    I like it

    k... so you and i talked earlierr and i must say... at 1st i wasn't too sure how things were gonna turn out... i rlly like the way you express everything... it's almost like you've been in my head this whole time.....taking what i'm feeling and putting it into the words i can't find....i must say.... yes i am a cheerleader...yes i hate some men...but you have given me a new outlook....the whole saying i love you and not meaning it....so me...i've done it to so many guys....but i must say....depressing is the least this is....it's true....I love it....I should probably tell u this so i don't seem like a hypocrite....i've been a cutter for almost 3 years....that's why depressing doesn't scary me...I rlly like this poem...keep writing


  • Exoskeletal
    May 3, 2008

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    'Thrilled' is not the word I'd use either. But it is really good. But an artist is never satisfied. It has the requisite emotion to draw me in.

    I was taken in by the salient moments in this piece. Describing a certain kind of relationship it had personal meaning to me.


  • Dirty and Broken
    May 1, 2008

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    i really like the first stanza but i'm not so sure about the second one....but anyways, message me when u finsih it, i think it will be awesome