Listen to that little voice inside
That tells you wrong from right
And the truth from all the lies
No matter how many times
You thought of taking your life
And succumbing to suicide
Remember who is always with you
Standing right there beside you
Telling you it’s time to choose
The right way to go
We do it so that you know
You can spread your wings and grow
I know that there’s pain inside
And that sometimes you want to die
But try to do what’s right
Life isn’t always an easy road
At times the road is bumpy and cold
Other times you’ll be left alone
Your friends need you everyday
You’d be wrong if you were to say
We wouldn’t care if you fade away
Let me say just a couple of words
And it may seem just a little absurd
But you’ve got to work with the hurt
Strive for what you really want
After that you’ll leave behind the taunts
Suckers are what Lonliness haunts
for now you can play their game
show them that they’re all the same
make them wish they never played
don’t be a person who falls when pressured
personality is how character is measured
so let your mind crack open a fissure
releasing everything you held inside
the things you kept from our sight
that made you lose your mind
then remember all of us
just take a second to think because
you’ll be saying “ this is who I was”
“this is who I am today
I’m Bobby Holeton, I’ll never fade
Life is a game, and I wanna play”
Author notes
kind of a sad poem yet hopeful in a way. when i was in my big "creation" stage of my writing my friend bobby wanted to committ suicide. it wasn't a fun time for any of us in our little friend group. a bunch of friends including me, tried to convince him otherwise, and he apparently listened to what we had to say.
the weird thing was that he didn't beleive that anybody truly cared if he lifed or died.....the truth is that we do care and we did help him to rid himself of such thoughts.
this poem is just one of a couple that i had written. i picked it to put on here because it was the best descriptive one that i had. the bad thing was that this event proved to be a very strong source of inspiration.....
please read and leave comments that help me make this poem just a little bit better....even if it means re-typing the whole thing.
what needs improvement?!?!?!?
Comments
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O.O Dude
That's like..dude. It is SO freaky that you wrote this and I read it cause it is like...dude. Teehee, I'm going through stuff that is scary similar to this and in a way this is like a slap in the face...in a good way!
Besides, I do agree that life is a game. One thing that jumps out to me though is how the last line of each verse leads to the next. I'm not completely sure if that helps or not...of course I can get all picky sommetimes. If I were you, I think I'd make them six lined stanzas rather than three, just to put it all together. BUT that's just me!
Nicely done,
AShley
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