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Silence.

Thoughts,
words

flying viciously
in my
twisted,
tormented head.

Silence came long ago
smothered the screams,
to forever stay

Um I don't know speak the truth lol :)

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  • secret13
    May 13

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    Wow that picture is disturbing but I like your poem. I think it conveys alot in the limited amount of words. My criticism would be that it looks like another person is in the picture who is not mentioned. Maybe there is a way that you could include that person or convey that the hand is not meant to be taken literally, that it's mentally silencing you.

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    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
      May 13
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      um well..you could assume its her hand just as much as its someone elses...and when it comes to picture inspired poems, I dont write what I see in the picture...therefore not one poem of mine like that has every detil that is in the picture.

      I am not telling you about the picture and what it contains..and I am telling you what it makes me feel, within my words.

      it isn't hard to get the fact that this hand is mentally silencing etc..from my words....so now I wonder are you really reading what is in front of you....cause if you were you wouldn't even write the comment , you did.


      Criticism not taken on board in other words, sorry but yeah.....


  • SpiritDarkmaiden
    May 13
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    Very nice, and truly horrifying. I love the pic. Nice work

  • DrkPoet
    May 14

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    The picture is cool, and your words seemed to fit it quite well and you're right not easy to do in 20 words but you pulled it off great!

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