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My haven.

Sapphire silky waters
bathe me.
Trickle down smooth
tired skin.
Ever so slowly
I massage feet on
perfect size pebbles delicately
placed in the stream.

This is my haven.

Um I don't know speak the truth lol :)

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  • Itinerary
    May 12

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    Enjoyed:]

    First off I thought the background and picture you picked were great to go along with the poem. It was real short but for this poem it worked out good. "I massage feet on perfect size pebbles delicately placed in the stream."
    Those lines were great imagery because I think almost everyone has felt pebbles on there feet in nice cool water. It had a pure feel to it and I enjoyed the read.

    • Well actually the picture was in a contest and I had to write a poem inspired from it ///then the bckground, just thought ws perfect lol

      Does make for a complete feeling package, your right...I love massaging my feet on the peebles over at the beach we live at etc, so thatis what inspired thoses thoughts

      Thank you for stopping in on this one, much appreciated



      Cindy

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    omg love love love her......and Ranger is mine back off ''hehe

    yep she drews me is in so well, makes me laugh, specially yes stuff ups and lula hehe

    have read em all aa hundred times..own right up till the latest lol and some other books of hers too lol , great writer

    Ranger and me naked in the batcave...definetly a wonderful place to be hahhhha


    Cin