Standing there
thinking watching
praying crying
waves crashing
mist on my face
wondering
I step forward
closer now
I see it all
staring
the jagged rocks
calling me
encouraging me
One more step
waves dancing
the setting sun
birds over head
a gust of wind
To the edge
doubting fear
hesitation
I turn back
slipping
falling
Waves laughing
birds singing
"Good-bye"
I hit the rocks
cold water against me
my blood mixing with waves
Staring up
the cliffs
so cruel
I see myself
standing there
laughing
Standing there
thinking watching
praying smiling
waves crashing
mist on my face
wondering
Reviews
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OM FING GOD
HEY I really like this.!!!!!! did you just write that christ! -
amazingl written it has a fast past which indicates how quick the thoughts go through ones head.
well done!!
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This is fast paced and exciting. The flow is nice and compliments the short use of lines. This creates a picture and that's always a ncie thing to have in your ind while reading someones work. People can relate to this too, so this is a good read.
nicely done,
Ashley
SYmPtOm.QuEeR.
May 13, 2008
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