Fused.

Patience; while the earth you found. I ached, I grew   ‘seek out your destination, discover what is true’   Bewildering battles you survived, Enduring              ‘breaking’ burdens,               all to be with me.   Now Inside my soul, your essence rushes these rivers with mine   Losing all concept of time,            everything            there’s only you.     In our loyal consummation heavens                                 wake to pleasurable cries                          we breathe, contented in this fusion secure in such bliss.

Um I don't know speak the truth lol :)

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  Papyrus
  May 23
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  Spring is in the air!

  Cindy,
  
  "Now
  inside my soul, your essence
  rushes these rivers with mine"
  - fav. stanza for sure.
  
  words like [ached, grew, earth, and rivers] really expound upon the mental image given by the above picture, so although you don't depict the specific "battles survived" or "breaking burdens," there is an overall theme of growing in maturity and with "patience," while Mother Earth unites the two lovers.
  
  the only thing that really seemed awkward to me was "there's only you." maybe i'm just jaded, but when two people come together, wouldn't it be "us"? oh, and where did the quote come from? i'm quite curious.
  
  "patience" was the perfect first word. heh. i need to be more patient, i suppose. it's the right one, or no one, for me (fingers crossed).
  
  very sensual, Cindy.
  
  and the picture is quite fitting.
  
  best,
  
  Pap
  

  
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    MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 23
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    Hey glad you liked this one Papy, I am kinda in love with it myself hahahahaha
    
    
    Quote?? it's not a quote, have more faith in me then that lol..Honestly I was sitting there typing away, like a general idea of the poem...then I was going to go back and clean, edit etc for contest...and I didn't even stop and think, that line just came out of my head exactly like that...lol
    
    I said to MJ, it ws like it typed itself and I read it and it was perfect & said the perfect thing I wanted it too....
    
    So now the question is '''have I just made another of my own quotes?''hehehehehe
    
    You'll have to visit my ap page to see the few I have created myself, havent got around to putting them on here yet lol
    
    
    
    Cin
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      Papyrus
      May 24
      
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      comment on another comment and your replies

      Cindy,
      
      thanx for the replies! i love how you make up your own quotes. priceless.
      
      u have fallen in love with this one, Cindy, which makes changing it very difficult. i know the feeling. but personally, i liked the omitted {sigh}. sounded very erotic to me. hahaha. maybe find a better place for it?
      
      but i haven't been around as long as MJ or yourself.
      
      at least i liked "rushes these rivers with mine" before he did. hehehehe.
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        MaMa-2-be-Cindy
        May 25
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        lol, i make em up and I don't even know it hehe
        
        yeah im going with MJ...only cause right from the start it ws something that was bugging me, so when it is and then someone confirms it..it's all for a reason lol
        
        I love it, and yes you loved it before him
        
        
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    MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 23
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    oh yeah I forgot lol....the thing you brought up bout there's only you...it is correct in the degree of what I m saying is like, I'm losing all conecpt of time, everything there's only you...but I was more poetic and left the I out ...lol
    
    but if you think it's confusing, maybe I will keep looking at it...i dont want it to be, cause I love this poem hehehe
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  Goin 2 Ashes
  May 23
  
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  Awesome!

  This piece is so beautiful,
  I had to read it repeatedly,
  and each time I read it It became more beautiful than before.
  I admire your skill with words and the romantic/erotic ways you weave into them, the patterns of your heart.
  
  Have a wonderful day Cindy,
  
  Your friend,
  
  Rich
  
  
  

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    MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 23
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    I love that you said that, one of my fav things is to be dranw to reading something over & over a fewtimes, to yes only have it become more beautiful in front of your eyes..So yay, I am honured mine has done that for you
    
    I am so proud of this write and loving how much it's being appreciated
    
    
    Cindy
• mojojames
  May 23
  
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  This is a powerful piece Cindy, filled with images of earth at its ripest and most bountiful, along with human struggle and fight to be together. The first two lines have me confused slightly though. The message I got from them, for me is clearer like this:
  
  Patience.
  
  While the earth you found,
  I ached, I grew.
  
  Maybe totally off, tell me if I am. I really like the line "rushes these rivers with mine..."
  
  Only other thing - I don´t think you need the aside - (sigh) without it the stanza flows well, with it in you have a break in rhythm and line sense. The piece has a great feel to it. Good one. MJ
  
  
  

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    MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 23
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    Hi there MJ.
    
    I suppose the first two lines are saying in simple terms I'm to be patient while he finds he feet basically..but giving it s true feeling to the picture to is me wording it like while the earth you found ..aswell
    
    My favourite to is that line rushes these rivers with mine...love how it just came from now where, typed itself and I looked it and ws yeah, perfect
    
    I agree with you on the sigh actually, I don't think it ever truly felt right to me...having you confirm it means it's getting the boot lol
    
    
    Cindy
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  Jumbiliajerky
  May 24
  
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  i like it

  i like it a lot! its great and so are most of your other poems
  i cant wait untill you write more so i can read them!
  ta-ta for now,
  me

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    MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 25
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    Aw thanks so kind