A silent knight,
Hushes all with subtle starlit kisses.
A swift, faint encounter of lips on silken flesh.
Come to me are you, my love?
Enticing words drift from a harmonious voice,
Laced with temptation.
A tame heart in contrast to one feral with lust
What sweet seduction is this,
To fall endlessly into a nameless heaven?
Time is unconceivable
Straying into tender respite are we,
The only innocence in these forbidden lands.
Behold,
Grey dawn calls the unwary,
Slipping through blanketed comfort,
Amber light casting glory on foreign sins committed.
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Wonderfully Written
I must say I'm blown away, the imagery shines in my eyes. There are hidden truths within these words, The wording gives sway to many emotions, I feel each person will have a different interpretations of this poem which is a wonderful thing to achieve. As a fellow poet congratuation and thank you sharing this world with us.
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Thank you!!! I love to envoke strong imagry in my writting, whether it is through word choice or description, or a combination of the two, thank you for you comment, it helps me grow as a writter!
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Nice job in every way i could think of. Structure, wording, flow, subject. Nice vocab there. And I forgot it didn't rhyme, not that I think poems have to rhyme, just thought I'd point that out anyway. Like the end. It brings it together. Nice imagery too. I could go on forever about this.
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