That fluttery feeling
In the pit of your stomach,
What is it?
Oi! That's lovin'!
But I don't like anyone!
That nervous feeling
You get around someone,
What is it?
Oi! That's lovin!
I said I don't like anyone!
That red flush you get
When you glance at someone, fast,
What is it?
Oi! That's lovin'!
But I said I don't like someone...
That moment you question,
Could I like him?
What is it?
Oi! That's lovin'!
I already know that!
Maybe I like someone.
Author notes
Just something I did about this guy I've been...well, thinking of lately. A bit more than I usually have. And it is a different guy, so that's a good thing. It's not one of my best, but I thought it was a bit funny.
Does this seem lighthearted but serious at the same time?
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too light hearted
it sounds like it'd be in a musical. wow. like a canaian 80's musical. that's....not a poem. read my stuff. those are poems -
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Excuse me?
What is with you? First that message you sent me, and now you're telling me this isn't a poem. You have a maturity issue. You need to learn to act like a 17 year old. Why do you have a problem with me? I didn't even know you were on here. Get a life and stop harassing people through internet. That is probably the most immature thing you can do.
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ok?
well thats different ..........................................
neways i like but u sound canadian! OI! lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ok...........its ok i guess but u have written better so ya bye bye now
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Duh becca
Duh I've written better ones Becca.
You know I never do as good when I write love poems...and "Cousin It" gives me less inspiration than...uh...you know who did. I AM A PROUD CANADIAN SPEAKER!!! lol. One day left!
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It isn't the content that makes this a good poem. But your turn of phrase. Are you really 13?
I used to write when I was in primary school, but often my parents used to question whose poetry it really was.
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Thank you!!
Yes, I'm 13. You must have been good if your parents were suspicious that it wasn't your poetry in primary school. I'll be sure to check some of yoursout, but could you tell me what you mean by my turn of phrase? -
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Turn of phrase
Turn of phrase means the way you put things to make meaning in your poetry, or in writing in general. It's a skill that I'm not sure you can acquire.
On my poetry though, read my archived stuff if you're interested. My new stuff lacks something... maybe turn of phrase.
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Sure.
It's interesting how the stanzas start seriously and then become lighthearted. Interesting in a good way. It's strange to me how I can relate to every part of this piece, but I do. And for lack of a better word, I'll say it's interesting again. :}
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Thanks!
Thank you. I expected to be criticised for this one.
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