Upon seeing the photography,
There was none of the predicted sickly.
I couldn't engage him directly.
Were his eyes deathly?
Our encounter: swift swing to his temples
last night -- I took his mucous.
Tied but alert I slid sharps
through both achilles tendons.
Hear this... "Arf!"
Justice. And all I can do is laugh.
Equilibrium? Not even by halves!
Won't teach all knaves.
Was the gift sweeter?
Behemoth no longer.
The dream just ended as he wore
The Flaming Wreath fire.
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I very much want to understand what it is that I am reading. I am having very real difficulty getting a grasp of the subject matter. I have several strong ideas only to have them wiped out later in the poem.
Some language problems may be causing this. American vs. Australian.
"Sharps?" Sharp things to pierce the ankles?
"I took his mucous" has a homosexual connotation or sometimes refers to spitting.
I like the juxtapositioning of "justice" and "equilibrium"
This is a reaction to a photograph.
Who was "tied but alert" the poet or the person with whom he was having the encounter?
What is "predicted sickly?"
This has the possibility of being a powerful set of images. I, as a reader, would just like to be a bit more "in on" what it is you are describing.
Sorry to be so dense.
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Thanks heaps for your questions. I've gotten one other message like this, yearning for answers. I think I just write like this. In a coded manner, I'm not sure that's desirable. I suppose I don't like to just say things, and to just give away meaning.
Most of my poetry comes out of emotion. This my reflexive observation of emotions as I see the first photo of someone that had done heinous acts to someone dear to me.
And my ideations of follow-though. Torture. (Without realisation.) Let me know if your questions any still stand now that you know. On one though, "mucous", that reference is a part of the penis.
I've written heaps of poetry about my partner, this is just one. While politics and environmental egalitarianisms are close for me, I'm not an apt commentator on these matters -- which makes me question if/how much I really care.
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May 29