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Stuck

Infatuation is temptation
and sometimes there’s manipulation.

Procrastinating resolution isn’t the solution
dont you want forward motion?

No doors, confined to the space of this cluster
scream for miles, they bounce back, attack; no strength to muster.

From here, the stars acid rain formed, fell and my soul it burned.
For all my time held here, not one lesson had I learned,
still infatuated with temptation
always procrastinating resolution, never reaching any solution.


STUCK, so long ago I remember moving forward, having motion.

Now this cluster and me
understand, this place we’ll stay forever,
It’s meant to be.

Um I don't know speak the truth lol :)

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  • skipeople
    June 6

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    This is weird for you, I think. The same kind of thing happened to me with "nothing exists". Like the style is way out there. Still, I think this works for you. It is like a different side to your writing I suppose? The rhyming is very nice and not forced, which is always good. =] Plus, you got your message through about being stuck. Which, of course, people can relate to in a way.

    Nicely done,
    Ashley


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
      June 6
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      heheh oh yes it is totally weird for me...i was having a weird night...let me try explain lol...my partner and I are trying to have a baby..

      part of the write came from the frustration that you cant just have it happen like that lol and my infatuation..cause yes the thought of now going to be having one sooon sometime etc..has just made me infatuated with babies lol

      then the weird angle of this, the acid rain, clusters stuff...came from the fact that I was trying to write soemthing for another contest..that had a picture of stars...the one i have on here called astral children...nothing i wanted to come would....but this did in the end lol


      deinitely most deinitely weird for me...but we all have it in us hehe

      Thanks Ashley lovely to see you stop in on this one



      Cindy

  • dave ochs silver member
    June 12

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    hey cindydelicious

    different than your usual fare, more like a rant, nothing long with your contest writings but nothing wrong not having the restrictions either.
    dave

    . Rewarded 4


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
      June 13
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      yep its deinitely more of a rant lol

      yeah i like restrictions but I like not having them too lol