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she is

She's the last leaf
I watch fall from the trees
She's the Autumn air
without the breeze
That unobtainable girl
that brings me close to my knees
and it kills me everytime
I watch her leave

It's not done, I did it as a quickwrite. I still have alot to tweak about it

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  • nessa.lyn
    June 1, 2008
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    so far so good i want to hear.. or read the rest finish!

  • Bailiwick
    June 1, 2008

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    It does sound like a song--it has that rhythmic quality to it. I'm really looking forward to seeing more of this.

    Bailey


  • skipeople
    June 1, 2008

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    I like it, nice start. This sounds like a song to me. I like the rhyming here, it doesn't sound forced. Can't wait for you to finish it! This should turn out pretty good.

    Nicely done,
    Ash