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why am I so ( hello hello)

Why am I so
If I am not yours
why am I so
if nothing else cures
why am I so
If I live so insecure
why am I so
hello
hello


why am I so
why am I here
why do I exist
why do I fear
the end is so near
and why do I choke
the moment I start to breath
why do I say
what I don't mean
Like the last time
you walked
away
from me

so why am I so
If I do not know
these shoes are too tight
but I've yet to outgrow
so they stay on my feet
and I stay in the backseat
my life is sealed beneath
all my past
concreate

and why am I so
If there's no where to go
why am I so
when I'm,
oh-so alone
Why am I so
if you are away
why am I so
when nothing in
my life stays
tell me why am I so
hello?
hello?

Author notes

I wrote it, really in like 4 mins. quickwrite. It reminds me of the beatles. It's about questioning why you're alive , when you feel you have nothing else left
and you feel no ones there. hence the " hello hello"

is it like...okay

    : Comment:

Comments


  • sweetspiritonline
    June 4, 2008

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    =[ is it okay?

    you know what? Becca, EVERYTHING you freakin write is beautiful! i dont know why you even doubt your abilities to write! i mean SERIOUSLY!!!! i LOVE this one!!! =] awesometastic job!!! XD
    ~Anna

    language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.