So theres a man who's never seen
and it hurts,
thought a worthless man was he
on this earth,
no matter light of day or dark
they won't notice him,
theres a man who's never seen
and he wrote,
"Dear Diary,
i can't take it...
anymore"
No one can love him anymore
of which he's sure,
just a one man trip for him
sprawled on the floor,
will this horrid pain ever leave
oh will i be,
one day loved and settled down
but he wrote,
"Dear Diary,
i can't take it...
anymore"
So it's another unseen death
to the masses,
just a worthless journeys end
forgotten before its time,
cause both light of day or dark
they didn't notice him,
so he took to his grave
these words he wrote,
"Dear Diary,
i can't take it...
anymore"
"So Dear Diary,
i won't take this...
anymore"
Reviews
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
How creative. It is very different. I could feel the pain being poured out to this page. I see something authentic as well.
With some tweaking, it could shape and shine.
Misspell/typos-
there's
"thought" a worthless -I'm sure you meant 'though'
"on day lover and settled down
but he wrote" -- ?
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I am with Ck, the pain did so easily pour from this write
it flowed through so very smoothly..I like how it had a start and an end etc told the story
Cindy
CookieZeal
June 3, 2008
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