While you're thanking me, I'm thanking you
and we both know what I've been through. Still you're here, making sure I'm fine. All those nights, the tears I shed and I swear, oh I swear, I'd be dead if I had never found you. Do you realize what you have done? You took this soul and look what it has become. This is my fresh new start, a bright new day and even though you could turn away, you won't. I hope you know the things you've said have helped me out in times of dread. And even though I thought you didn't care, you changed my mind, you're always there. No set of words can show how I feel, but I think it's enough to let you in on my secret. I appreciate all that you have done. If I could save a day for you, the world would know what we've been through. They'd see the person I know that you can be. From lonely nights and heartless days to better thoughts, I owe you praise. For now I can wake each passing day and know someone cares, I know you care. |
Author notes
This is a freewrite kind of thing that I just felt the need to write for someone special. She has made me realize what I'm really worth and I don't know what would have happened if she had never came to be in my life. We just seem to have this understanding, this bond. And it's amazing. I know someone out there really cares, when no one else bothers to show it.
This song is meant to be more upbeat than anything. It's not crazy fast, when I hear it in my head, but it's no lullaby either.
Do you think this is enough to say thanks? Does the end seem a bit sharp (sudden) ?
Comments
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Spectacular!!!!
I think it gives plenty of thanks!! I love the way that you ended it! The ending is not at all sharp! In all our lives I think that we find a teacher that helps us so much that we have a need to thank them. You did a beautiful job! Kudos to you!!!

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I love the cadence of this piece. It lends itself easily to song, but also works nicely as a poem. You use repetition well, which adds to the "poetic" quality of this piece. My major suggestion would be to add a line or two at the ending. It does feel rather blunt, as you seem to already have noticed. The final stanza feels more like a refrain, it has value and relevance in several places within the piece, but doesn't really say anything conclusive. H

