Dearest,
we must say goodbye
wave our hands from a distance
and move on
no
there's no other,
there's no argument
i just don't like being here
anymore
i feel like shrimp
jumping for life
you cling like a leech
you hang around like a dog
and how i hate pests
a year is long enough
for games and laughter
i like my bed for myself
its time to kick you out
i rather have my room empty
than see your things all over
it makes me gag
and gag i do when i smell you
im over, things expire
and you are just another
of those worn out underwear models
that needs a bit more botox to work
your puppy eyes are disturbing
your sweetness irksome
i hate to tell you this
but i'd rather be gay
than stay with you
i hate to tell you this,
but im just not built for forever
i'd rather we say goodbye
from across the street
and not see each other again.
Best of Luck,
Dearest
Valentine
Reviews
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Playing around? With that poor persons head, haha. =}
This has an amused tone to it, like you've done this whole break-up scene before. It kept me going and it stand interesting. It also has a flow to it. Like it makes you come off as the stronger person b/c you realize you simply don't love htis person and think you're done playing with them. Haha.
Nicely done,
Ashley
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Hi Ashley
Glad this worked for you. Ah well when i wrote 'playing around' in my authors note...i meant when i wrote this poem i was playing around with ideas. I haven't written much poetry recently and seem to be in the carefree mood...so, i haven't done this whole break-up scene. Again, thanks for the read and comment.
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hey iphios
i thought this was awesome, a clingy person should be shot down like a horse with 2 broken legs and put out of their misery and yours. and i've been a clingy person and should've shot myself, or better had the strength to tell the other person screw you.
i didn't like your authors notes its like saying you didn't really mean it which was deflating.
dave. Rewarded 6
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Hey dave
taking your advice, i'll take out the author's note. good to know this was 'awesome.'
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burn
This is my favorite poem of yours. The icy niceness is strangely alluring. I hate clingers as well. I get upset if my boyfriend leaves a sock in my room so I feel your pain.
Andrea
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Hey Andrea,
Its good to know that you found the tone 'strangely alluring.' I was feeling rather sour when i wrote this and i despise clingers. Makes my skin crawl. Lol. Glad this little experiments work for people.
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June 26