I had her once, i snatched her from the sky
She was an angel, the being of light up high
Nothing seem to hinder our love that was true
Loving and caring solely for the other was all we could do
Fate was determined to prove nothing last forever
And even though life was grand, I did something I should have never
I crossed the only boundary into the vices that could tear us apart
Eventually she found out and promptly placed in a box her bleeding heart
She began her assent back to her home comprised of the heavens love
She could not go without her gift, she could not make it above
I caught her by the foot and proved finally I was real
By me being mortal carving out my own heart, my fate i'd seal
any opinion is helpful and is appreciated
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I like, but needs some repair
The first stanza was written in much better form than the other two, who were more meaningful to me.
Gripping Subject to me.
I actually broke a girls heart once, dumbest mistake of my life.
But that caused me to start writing and I haven't stopped since.
Great poem. Also, if you can, keep writing to this one. IT's good.
Johnaustinhickman
August 31, 2008
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