Life threw a party for me and I waited for the guests to arrive Anxiety came early with her two ugly sisters Nervousness and Doubt the three of them kept me cornered out in the kitchen for so long I missed how the party began luckily Experience came along and gave me a dig-out we went in to see what was cooking I went through all the guests but couldn't see the one I was looking for Shyness kept me talking over entrees everyone seems to think she's such a dear but that guy she always hangs with what's his name? yeah, Fear he gives me the creeps I talked with Sincerity for a while over drinks but he got boring he thinks too much he's too deep Empathy came in later on She seems to get along with everyone she'd been drinking with Abandon and Humour Paranoia was doing drugs in the toilets she couldn't relax and left early I think but that's only a rumour Jealousy kept trying to whisper to me Confidence couldn't get a look in Wonder and Angst played guessing games I found shelter talking with Humility in a quiet corner She introduced me to a great friend of hers - Peace we chatted together for a while then Love arrived - and smiled. |
Author notes
Written as a contest entry where poems personifying emotions were required.
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Oh! How lovely.
This is very rich and so very kind. Full of good humour and compassion and wit, one of your best I think - you seem to be on a roll at the moment, a pleasure to read and comment upon.
Power to yer pen, matey - whatever is behind this flowering I hope it's fruitful for you as a person and as an artist - xRA -
hey W
well as a emotional metaphor you nailed this. seems like you got into a zone writing this and everything fell neatly into place. a gift from the poetry gods.
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All poems are gifts.
You know, you're pretty much dead right, that's how it was. But then I always believe that poetry is more a matter of 'listening' to your muse than talking to it and that nearly all poems that ARE poems are a 'gift' such as you describe. That sounds pretty airy-fairy maybe but that's how I write. Thanks for the kind words Professor. >W<
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oh my god, i found this really intriguing and very clever, the theme and concept laid out really well, there is a real intelligience in this piece, its structure and flow. Well done!love it!
language: 3, rhythm: 5, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Nobody likes a smart-ass!
Hi L. Intriguing, clever and intelligent are words I'm going to keep and show to my friends! No, wait a minute, then I wouldn't have any! Have to think about that one! But I DO thank you for the very flattering comment. >W<
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Two thumbs up!
I really like the concept! It's not as easy as some people think to carry a theme that well. The way the personalities were described was a creative and yet realistic portrayl of very real emotions. -
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Thank you for the kind words here BB. Sometimes a poem just gets legs and walks. This one was up and running as soon as I had the idea of a party.
Haven't met you before so welcome to Sharepo. I'll try to return the favor asap. >W<
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Hello Cal. Thanks for stopping by. I take it you think this one's okay. >W<
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I don't know about Cal, but too few of us get smiled on by Love.
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