Won't you sit and stay by my side
Please don't run and hide
I love you so
So please don't go
Please don't break my heart into two
All I want is you
There will be no other
I am yours forever
My life and world belongs to you
So let our hearts renew
Renew into one our hearts will be
Our love makes me drop to my knee
My heart and soul will always be your
For all eternity
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A second and third read.
Upon reading this over again I noticed something I hadn't bofore. In line five, although I'm sure it's gramatically correct the way it is would have a better rhythm as - Please don't break my heart in two. However, now I see it as - don't break my one heart (both your hearts as one) into two. Also the rhyme would still be fine if you - drop to your knees- instead of knee. In the next line I think you missed an {s} on yours. Simply my opinion and I've been wrong before. -
Love poems, Love poems, Love poems...
so many of us love those love poems. I like the rhyme and rhythm of this poem. That's my natural type of writting. The way I hear it in my head so to speak. There's nothing more romantic than the concept of the love that last for eternity, and nothing more magical for those few lucky enough to find it. You've done a great job of portraying how much you want to work things out and how devoted you feel toward this person. This is the type poem of I was dying to receive at many points in my life. It would have won my heart without question. Alas I was the hopeless romantic, always giving, never receiving. Woe is me. Woe is me. Too dramatic? My best wishes for you.
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Thank you Brian,
Thank you , Your comment is highly appreciated. It means alot to me.
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