softly the whispers arise in the heart
quiet lingers still in this early hour
so gently the song lilts from the start
concealing the depth and strength of its power
dreams built on wishes begin to take hold
awakening all that once slept too deep
silent secrets that beg to be told
of two hearts love - too true to keep
once clinging to yesterdays that live no more
the unfolding day brings in joy anew
completely refreshing what was before
soft whispers of dream that do come true
MEg
09/09/2008
can you hear it?
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A softness and dreamlike quality about this poem, with sadness that can be overcome. Favourite lines....
"dreams built on wishes begin to take hold
awakening all that once slept too deep"
Nice imagery in those lines.
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Wow!
I loved this poem.. When I was reading this, for some reason I pictured waking up from a dream, and being dissapointed I was asleep, but then living the dream. I don't know why that happened.
I really enjoyed your rhyming scheme-especially the rhyme of "hour" and "power". It was strong, and somehow yet subtle...
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i smile.
while i was reading your poem, i felt a gentle smile paint my face...somehow, i felt wistful and while smiling a sighed a sweet sigh...
hi, meg...glad to read something from you again and what a wonderful read...yes, i feel it...if i'm getting it right, i'm feeling the dreams, the wishes and the whispers of what have passed but looking forward to the whispers of what is yet to come...
i'm really happy to have read this beautiful poem, meg. thanks for sharing.
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Beautiful!
I think my favorite line was the last one in the first stanza that said the song was concealing it's real strength. i can't explain it but i just know I've felt like that before. just one suggestion, sort of. in the last line is it supposed to be soft whishpers of
dream[s] that do come true, or is it just dream without an 's'?
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