September was a somber month,
It lingered in the past.
Still hung the constant memory,
like a haunting ever last.
We braved the trying turbulence,
and wandered through the storm.
Sometimes our words were angry,
and insisting like a swarm.
Time can't always heal the soul,
when the wound runs very deep.
We must distract our outer selves,
so our inner selves can weep.
Our emotions get the best of us,
and commandeer our thoughts.
Searching for a shapeless key,
to the answers we have sought.
Our faces are reminders,
of the feelings we eschew.
Both vilified and vindicated,
by the actions that we rue.
A lonely month and painful time,
September seemed indeed.
Its amazing what we can endure,
for the people that we need.
Some months are like that one,
where we never seem quite sure.
But I would live this every day,
as long as its with her.
-Enoq
Author notes
I wrote this in a few moments outside my house after a fight. It is not going to be altered.
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Again...beautiful!
I commented on one of your other poems regarding your love, and it blew me away, this one had the same effect. I think that the fact that you were able to write such a beautiful love poem following a fight speaks profoundly of your love for her,and your character in general. This again is just a beautiful piece of poetry, and no changing could make it any better than it already is.
I have to say that, September must send out an essence of uneasiness, because around that time of year, almost every year, turmoil seems to fall into my lap. A wonderful poem overall!
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Thank you
If you like this one then you might like "beauty and the beast" my newest addition. Thank you again for your kind words.
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I like that you don't want this poem to be altered. One of the things that I appreciate about poetry is when you know that it was written with absolute feeling and truth to the person writing it. The best moment though is even through the rough times you know who you love and no matter what this won't change.
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I am sorry if it is late, but I would like to extend my welcome to you, Enoq. I am not around here as much as I once was, and sometimes I miss finding a new intriguing colleague; on that note, I am glad I did not overlook your work, because I enjoyed the quick scanning of it I just did. I cannot write using rules at all, so when someone can pull it off as skillfully as you seem to be doing, I am duly impressed.
I appreciate that you are willing to be given suggestions on your work (I have always been surprised by people who do not take constructive criticism), and also that there are some poems that simply are. I chose this one for that exact reason. It seems easiest to get to know a person when there is shared openness, and it seemed appropriate to start here. There are so many powerful observations here. I often feel very nostalgic in September as well, so it was interesting for me to find that in your observation of the month as well (given, the reasons are different, but the universality of the emotion is something that I love poetry for revealing). You did a wonderful job of expressing the desolation and inevitability of being lost. And at the end, just as skillfully, you managed to give us a little glimpse of your devotion, again a powerful thing. Your sixth couplet hit me pretty solidly. I am not sure that you meant for it to be a puzzle, but I know I will be thinking about it for a while.
At any rate, thank you for putting this out here. Perhaps it is not the same with everyone, but the easiest poems to write (the emotional ones) are often the most difficult for me to share. I hope I will be reading more of your work soon, to get my structure fix.
Nienna
PS I know that you said it won't be altered...but I am wondering if "wondered" in the third couplet is perhaps supposed to be "wandered" and is a spelling mistake?
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WOW
Well first of all thank you! I don't think anyone has looked that hard at my work before nor derived as much meaning. It is the best gift a writer can receive to have someone tell them what their work meant. I have noticed that you do not follow rules with your writing. Its liberation allows you to express yourself much better than I. That is why I like reading your work. Very free and open while being quite well grounded and articulate. Thank you again for your generous words. I too look forward to reading more of your work.
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you may not have noticed it but before i even read the author's notes, i thought it was gonna be about 9/11. which, it could be about that, but i reread it imagining how it was supposed to have been read and it was
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Well done.
I won't try to guess your rules. I like the fact that your come right out and say "I'm not changing it!" To be honest I like the style of it and didn't really see anything I would have changed any way. I understood the sentiment. If you truly love someone you'll go through anything for them.
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