Oh have you heard of Hon Printai,
The land of beasts and lore?
If never told this story bold,
Then you I shall not bore!
(I)
It all began when Lord Printai,
Called all the men around.
To them he gave a daring quest,
A treasure to be found!
(II)
To them he said "Come hear me say,
He who think's himself strong,
I have a quest for you to take,
Not short but very long!:"
(III)
For years men came and left their lives,
They risked it all to seek,
A treasure they were told would be,
All theirs to take and reap.
(IV)
Never a man did come back home,
Alive or with the find.
Lord Printai began to wonder if,
He'd perhaps lost his mind.
(V)
He asked his court "So shall I seek,
One last to send away!
Find me a man who's brave and strong,
By the end of this day!"
(VI)
The people brought to him a man,
Whose strength could not be matched.
A man so brave and unafraid,
Any beast he would catch.
(VI)
Before Lord Printai he bowed down,
And gave his name aloud.
"Lord Printai, I am Caromon,
To serve you I am proud."
(To be continued...)
Author notes
So, now I'm trying myself with a ballad. Fictional of course... in the form of lore. Anyways, this is the first part. More later... not sure when. Takes a lot to write just that little bit lol 8 syllables, 6 syllables, 8 syllables, 6 syallables. Lines 2 and 4 should always rhyme in this one as well. Anyways, enjoy and please, criticize if need be! This is old... some of you may have seen it previously. I have not changed anything or added to it. Just curious what newer members feel about it. I plan on adding to it this week :-) Be honest! I like any criticism! Positive or Constructive!! Thanks!!!!
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This is old... some of you may have seen it previously. I have not changed anything or added to it. Just curious what newer members feel about it. I plan on adding to it this week :-) Be honest! I like any criticism! Positive or Constructive!! Thanks!!!!
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Your rules and regulations...
would drive me quite insane.
When I'm writing poetry
my method is quite plain.
I listen to a voice
I hear inside my head.
Then write upon some paper
or post them here instead.
I don't follow rules to well
I rarely count my beats.
For you to write
with all these rules
must be quite a Feat.
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I hate cliffhangers!
Wow! so is caromon a knight? i've got so many questions! just hurry up and write the second part, even a third and fourth if need be. and don't be afraid to go into detail. it'll be more enticeing.
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