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Every time I try to sleep,
I keep thinking about the one who hurt me,
I was so in love with him he didn't see,
Because he broke my heart and broke it good,

I always in image him holding close,
Kissing all the tears that i bestow,
Once thinking that i would be with him,
Be in his arms forever,

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  • Livin.4.God
    October 29, 2008

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    It was good and short. But it was short..

    I was just wondering though, is this incomplete? Because of the title and the comma at the last night..

    Anyways, I really like it, great job!
    Hope.


  • Lake Absence
    October 29, 2008

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    Great job. It's short, but in no way whatsoever does it need to be longer. You've used lovely words that your general audience could understand. Great job,

    Lake.